作文《学炒菜》的二次指点（语音课）
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">前几天发了作文《学炒菜》的语音<span style="color: black;">指点</span>，在学校<span style="color: black;">需求</span>的<span style="color: black;">基本</span>上额外提出了两点新<span style="color: black;">需求</span>，<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>们在写作中落实得很好。作文完成后，对所有<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>的作文进行了详批详改，<span style="color: black;">需求</span>学员针对讲评重新修改，并循序渐进地再次提出三点更进一步的新<span style="color: black;">需求</span>。把这三点新<span style="color: black;">需求</span>落实下去，每名学员就<span style="color: black;">能够</span>打造出一篇精品佳作。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"> 下面是写作前的<span style="color: black;">第1</span>次<span style="color: black;">指点</span>。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">作文要改，并循序渐进地改，这作文<span style="color: black;">加强</span>的必由之路，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是我辅导作文的核心所在。批改作文其实<span style="color: black;">便是</span>一对一的作文辅导，不<span style="color: black;">详细</span>指出不足，<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>自然不会做针对性修改，不修改哪来的<span style="color: black;">加强</span>？学校里老师的<span style="color: black;">教育</span>千头万绪，<span style="color: black;">况且</span>一个班<span style="color: black;">那样</span>多<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>，<span style="color: black;">无</span>精力进行<span style="color: black;">仔细</span>批改。<span style="color: black;">此刻</span>社会上绝大<span style="color: black;">都数</span>作文培训<span style="color: black;">公司</span><span style="color: black;">亦</span>不<span style="color: black;">供给</span>作文<span style="color: black;">仔细</span>批改，<span style="color: black;">原由</span>有三点，一是工作量太大；二是培训教师不具备相应的水平；三是<span style="color: black;">公司</span>有<span style="color: black;">需求</span>，评语不<span style="color: black;">准许</span>超过三行，多了怕露怯，有<span style="color: black;">消极</span>影响。我不怕，批改<span style="color: black;">仔细</span>到什么地步<span style="color: black;">大众</span>自己看。随便<span style="color: black;">选择</span>几篇，不是这几篇批得好，是这几篇正好手机里有<span style="color: black;">照片</span>。这段时间批了不下30篇，每篇都是<span style="color: black;">这般</span>详批详改。</p>
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