满分作文《这事，真有意思》，尺素传情，老师：借鉴可不可贪多
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">在作文中，“信件”这个素材的出场率是比较高的，<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>们能够从信件的含义出发去思考信件在古代<span style="color: black;">或</span>在现代的<span style="color: black;">道理</span>，表达了什么样的感情。今天就来欣赏一篇与信件<span style="color: black;">相关</span>的中考满分作文《这事，真有意思》。</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">从这个标题来看，还是很<span style="color: black;">白话</span>化的，在考试中<span style="color: black;">运用</span><span style="color: black;">白话</span>化的语言去做标题时要<span style="color: black;">小心</span>，要多思考<span style="color: black;">是不是</span>合适，在文中<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是<span style="color: black;">同样</span>，<span style="color: black;">白话</span>化的句子不要太多。作文有其专门的语言，<span style="color: black;">白话</span>化<span style="color: black;">太多</span>，老师会认为这个<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>胸中<span style="color: black;">无</span>“笔墨”，平时<span style="color: black;">无</span>做好<span style="color: black;">累积</span>，<span style="color: black;">无</span>文采。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">文案</span>的开头是一段带有美感的句子<span style="color: black;">做为</span>题记，其实题记并不<span style="color: black;">意见</span><span style="color: black;">运用</span>，题记的语言大多都是<span style="color: black;">饱含</span>深意，<span style="color: black;">包括</span>感情的句子，<span style="color: black;">况且</span>要对全文的感情<span style="color: black;">或</span>思想做出总结，大多都是很隐晦的句子，<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>能够从其他作品中<span style="color: black;">累积</span>到的句子<span style="color: black;">能够</span><span style="color: black;">运用</span>，<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>是自己思考的题记，难免会想法<span style="color: black;">不足</span>，<span style="color: black;">或</span>感情<span style="color: black;">不足</span>而<span style="color: black;">作为</span>赘余，对<span style="color: black;">文案</span><span style="color: black;">无</span><span style="color: black;">帮忙</span>。</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">文案</span>的开头写到了母亲<span style="color: black;">青年</span>的时候，和笔友通信的故事，在那个年代是<span style="color: black;">无</span>手机的，即便是<span style="color: black;">tel</span>，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>只是用在生活琐事上面，和人深入交流用的<span style="color: black;">便是</span>信件。在母亲的鼓励下，“我”<span style="color: black;">亦</span><span style="color: black;">起始</span><span style="color: black;">运用</span>这种方式来交友，<span style="color: black;">这般</span>的方式让“我”交到了<span style="color: black;">伴侣</span>，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>让“我”的生活<span style="color: black;">起始</span>“带劲”。接着就写到了古代的信件，用了司马迁、笛卡尔、傅雷等事例<span style="color: black;">明显</span>书信的美好。古人与今人<span style="color: black;">同样</span>，在写信的时候都怀有万千思绪，饱含深情。从写信这件事情，让“我”<span style="color: black;">针对</span>时间，岁月有了新的感悟，最后结尾处点题，写信这件事，可真带劲儿。</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">记得有一首歌的名字叫做《从前慢》，这首歌是根据作家木心的诗改编而来的，其中的一句歌词诗：“车，马，邮件都慢，<span style="color: black;">一辈子</span>只够爱一个人”，信件的交流是很慢的，和车，马<span style="color: black;">同样</span>，<span style="color: black;">不外</span>写信的感觉是很幸福的。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">文案</span>的选材很新颖，立意很新颖，<span style="color: black;">选取</span>了带有传统<span style="color: black;">寓意</span>的书信，从文中的语句中，就能够看出作者想要表达了学会在等待体会<span style="color: black;">愉快</span>”“情感需要慢慢积淀”“<span style="color: black;">办事</span>心境应从容”的感情。<span style="color: black;">这儿</span>给<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>们的启发是，带有传统文化色彩的素材<span style="color: black;">常常</span>能够让作文脱颖而出，像京剧、武术、陶艺、中医、剪纸等都是这类。</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">这篇作文是比较成功的，使得<span style="color: black;">非常多</span><span style="color: black;">朋友</span>去仿写，上海2018年、2019年的中考满分作文《真的<span style="color: black;">不易</span>》《这事，真带劲》都是采用了<span style="color: black;">文案</span>的内容，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>得到了满分，<span style="color: black;">不外</span>2020年的一篇作文《有一种甜》<span style="color: black;">一样</span>是<span style="color: black;">这般</span>做的，却只拿到了零分。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">可见<span style="color: black;">这般</span>一篇作文能够适用于<span style="color: black;">非常多</span>作文题，内容不要变，题目<span style="color: black;">能够</span><span style="color: black;">持续</span>地改。<span style="color: black;">然则</span>，全篇<span style="color: black;">文案</span>的套用，会被判定为抄袭，<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>们去欣赏满分作文，<span style="color: black;">累积</span>满分作文的时候，要学习作文题目的拟定，要学习运用<span style="color: black;">文案</span>的素材，要学习<span style="color: black;">文案</span>的构思等等，<span style="color: black;">然则</span>千万要记住不要去背作文，去大篇幅的运用其他人的作文，<span style="color: black;">这般</span>很容易被老师是做是抄袭，打零分，<span style="color: black;">这般</span><span style="color: black;">针对</span>自己的考试成绩是不负责的。</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">因此</span>一篇优秀的作文<span style="color: black;">必定</span>是<span style="color: black;">第1</span>眼被老师认可的作文，而不是被反复应用的作文，语文的学习是灵活的，写作文<span style="color: black;">亦</span>不是在<span style="color: black;">摆列</span>组合自己背下的<span style="color: black;">文案</span>，即便是相同题材的<span style="color: black;">文案</span>，写作方式<span style="color: black;">区别</span>，表达的感情<span style="color: black;">区别</span>，表达的想法<span style="color: black;">区别</span>，这<span style="color: black;">便是</span>两篇<span style="color: black;">文案</span>。<span style="color: black;">因此呢</span>，在写作文的时候，<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>们<span style="color: black;">必定</span>要多思考，多创新。</p>
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