五六年级写事写人作文怎么加强?
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">01</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">三四年级是写作的启蒙段,要</strong><span style="color: black;">晓得</span>一篇完整的作文是个什么样子的,<span style="color: black;">认识</span>写人写事的简单框架,<span style="color: black;">把握</span>基本的技巧,<span style="color: black;">例如</span>动作、比喻、拟人、形容等。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">3-4年级的<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>怎么写好作文</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">四五年级是写作的<span style="color: black;">基本</span>段,</strong>主攻细节,学习<span style="color: black;">怎样</span>观察,<span style="color: black;">怎样</span>写好物,再过渡到用观察物的技巧来写事,写出精彩的细节。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">作文的细节是什么?</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">五六年级进入写作<span style="color: black;">提高</span>段,</strong>写事写人的基本框架<span style="color: black;">无</span>问题,又有了<span style="color: black;">必定</span>的细节,此时需要<span style="color: black;">思虑</span>作文的<span style="color: black;">曲折</span>,让故事<span style="color: black;">恰当</span>又有<span style="color: black;">必定</span>的深度。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">咱们</span>先梳理下五六年级<span style="color: black;">重点</span>的习作类型:</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">五年级上册第二单元习作:“漫画”老师</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">五年级下册<span style="color: black;">第1</span>单元习作:那一刻,我<span style="color: black;">成长</span>了</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">五年级下册第四单元习作:他____了</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">五年级下册第五单元习作:形形色色的人</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">六年级上册第三单元习作:____让生活更美好</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">六年级上册第四单元习作:笔尖流出的故事</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">六年级上册第五单元习作:围绕中心意思写</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">六年级上册第八单元习作:有你,真好</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">这些都是写事写人作文,<span style="color: black;">况且</span>作文素材<span style="color: black;">亦</span>从自我的、真实的,过渡到别人的、虚构的。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">例如</span>六年级上册第四单元习作:笔尖流出的故事</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><img src="//q8.itc.cn/q_70/images03/20240819/08b275571831416bbbfbe9631a6ab211.jpeg" style="width: 50%; margin-bottom: 20px;"></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">相比写亲历的,这一题目的难度大了<span style="color: black;">非常多</span>。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">怎么办?先<span style="color: black;">认识</span>写好情节的关键——<strong style="color: blue;">故事山</strong></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">故事山模型</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">故事山模型是国外流行的叙事结构工具,它直观且易于理解,能够有效地<span style="color: black;">帮忙</span><span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>深入理解故事的<span style="color: black;">形成</span>,并培养读写习惯。</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">简单版的故事山分四步:</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">愿望——<span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">阻碍</span></span>——转机——实现</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">重点在<span style="color: black;">阻碍</span>,<span style="color: black;">阻碍</span>要<span style="color: black;">恰当</span>且有细节。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">咱们</span><span style="color: black;">根据</span>这一标准来看</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">“笔尖流出的故事”的第三个素材:</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;">环境:月光下的村庄</span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">名人</span>:铁蛋</span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;">铁蛋远道而来的表哥</span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">倘若</span>你写表哥一到村庄,铁蛋就跟他<span style="color: black;">一块</span>玩得很开心。那<span style="color: black;">无</span>任何<span style="color: black;">阻碍</span>。即使写得再有细节,作文分数<span style="color: black;">亦</span>不会高。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">农村的铁蛋跟远道而来的表哥,两者之间的愿望肯定是不<span style="color: black;">同样</span>的,<span style="color: black;">出现</span>了冲突,之后再<span style="color: black;">显现</span>转机,<span style="color: black;">而后</span>才真正实现愿望——各自懂得<span style="color: black;">非常多</span>,学得<span style="color: black;">非常多</span>,各自成长。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">这般</span>一说,<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>们能理解,但要真正写好,难度还是很大。</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">我<span style="color: black;">无</span>在农村<span style="color: black;">长时间</span>待过,不<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>环境和<span style="color: black;">名人</span>怎么写得更真实?</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">我自己<span style="color: black;">无</span>经历<span style="color: black;">这般</span>的事情,<span style="color: black;">亦</span>不<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>会<span style="color: black;">出现</span><span style="color: black;">怎么样</span>的冲突?</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">我感觉转机<span style="color: black;">亦</span>很难写啊,自己设置的转机总觉得太假了。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">看似并不<span style="color: black;">繁杂</span>的故事山模型,就四步,可是在<span style="color: black;">区别</span>的故事中,在虚构的素材里,不是一两节课就能学好的。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">咱们</span>把它设置成8节课,前面4节写事,后面4节写人。<span style="color: black;">由于</span>写人是在写事的基</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">础上的一种<span style="color: black;">提高</span>——</span><span style="color: black;">写人=人+事。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">前面4节,理解故事山模式,从过程加<span style="color: black;">阻碍</span>,到<span style="color: black;">心情</span>同步加<span style="color: black;">阻碍</span>。从<span style="color: black;">熟练</span>的亲历的故事,到不是亲历的故事;从懂得设置<span style="color: black;">曲折</span>,到<span style="color: black;">曲折</span>设置要合适且<span style="color: black;">恰当</span>。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第1课 情节:故事山的神奇效应</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第2课 情节:<span style="color: black;">心情</span>中尝试加层次</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第3课 情节:不是亲历的怎么写</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第4课 情节:<span style="color: black;">曲折</span>要合适且<span style="color: black;">恰当</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">后面4节课,把故事山模式从写事运用到写人,开头和结尾点到人的特点,中间的故事还是用前面4节课所学。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">名人</span>的<span style="color: black;">选取</span>,<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是从自己<span style="color: black;">熟练</span>的人到照片或<span style="color: black;">资讯</span>里看到的人,一点点理解虚构到底是怎么一回事,怎么把虚构写真实。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第5课 情节:一句话概括<span style="color: black;">名人</span>特点</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第6课 情节:写出<span style="color: black;">名人</span>前后的变化</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第7课 情节:带着疑问挖掘<span style="color: black;">名人</span>故事</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第8课 情节:写出对<span style="color: black;">名人</span>浓浓的情感</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">Q</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">有的家长经常问<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>,能<span style="color: black;">不可</span>开个课程,直接对应学校习作,一节课对应一篇学校习作吗?</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">A</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">这般</span><span style="color: black;">孩儿</span><span style="color: black;">容易</span>,爸妈<span style="color: black;">亦</span><span style="color: black;">容易</span>,都在老师您这提前写了。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">然则</span>作文训练是一种<strong style="color: blue;">思维训练和拓展</strong>,自己<span style="color: black;">得到</span>某一项技能后,<strong style="color: blue;">要懂得延伸到<span style="color: black;">区别</span>的作文题目和写作<span style="color: black;">需求</span>里</strong>,绝对不是分析一个写作<span style="color: black;">需求</span>,写一篇习作完成学校<span style="color: black;">需求</span>就行的。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">咱们</span>课程要<span style="color: black;">处理</span>的不是简单的学校习作合格的问题,而是要<strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;">处理</span><span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>写作的底层<span style="color: black;">规律</span></strong>,明白作文到底是什么回事。有了核心技能后,<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>能应对<span style="color: black;">区别</span>类型的习作。</span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">SUMMER</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">基于这一出发点,<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>的写作<span style="color: black;">需求</span>是高于学校习作的,课程中的技法都覆盖了习作的写作<span style="color: black;">需求</span>。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">例如</span>我们<span style="color: black;">刚才</span>说的8节课,<span style="color: black;">必定</span>要说到延伸的话,它<span style="color: black;">能够</span><span style="color: black;">触及</span>到这些学校习作。</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第1课 情节:故事山的神奇效应</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">技法延伸</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">四年级上册第五单元习作:生活万花筒</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">四年级上册第六单元习作:记一次游戏</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第2课 情节:<span style="color: black;">心情</span>中尝试加层次</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">技法延伸</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">四年级上册第八单元习作:我的心儿怦怦跳</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第3课 情节:不是亲历的怎么写</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">技法延伸</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">六年级上册第三单元习作:让生活更美好</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第4课 情节:<span style="color: black;">曲折</span>要合适且<span style="color: black;">恰当</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">技法延伸</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">六年级上册第五单元习作:围绕中心意思写</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">写人</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第5课 情节:一句话概括<span style="color: black;">名人</span>特点</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">技法延伸</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">五年级下册第五单元习作:形形色色的人</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第6课 情节:写出<span style="color: black;">名人</span>前后的变化</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">技法延伸</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">五年级上册第二单元习作:“漫画”老师</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">第7课 情节:带着疑问挖掘<span style="color: black;">名人</span>故事</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">技法延伸</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;">总的<span style="color: black;">来讲</span>,五六年级<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>的作文<span style="color: black;">提高</span>,<span style="color: black;">重点</span>在情节,这<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是记叙文的难点和重点。它需要一个漫长的训练期,一个小点一个小点地打开<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>的思维,让<span style="color: black;">她们</span>懂得情节的重要,慢慢<span style="color: black;">把握</span><span style="color: black;">办法</span>,联系自己的生活<span style="color: black;">实质</span>,运用这些<span style="color: black;">办法</span>。</p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">新生报名需要两步:</strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;">第1</span>步:</strong>扫描下方二维码,上传2-3篇写人写事作文,丁丁老师考核之后,会有老师<span style="color: black;">微X</span><span style="color: black;">通告</span>合适的班型<span style="color: black;">意见</span>和时间安排。(注:新生请上传作文,否则报名无效。)</p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;">第二步:</strong><span style="color: black;">已然</span>获取班型<span style="color: black;">意见</span>的新生,<span style="color: black;">能够</span><span style="color: black;">根据</span>老师<span style="color: black;">意见</span>报名。</p>
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